BrandonSP
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| Giftorcurse wrote: | | Sorry, I tend to visualize a lot. Also, Alphaboy is very anime in style, in particular Evangelion, so call it my tribute. |
Do you plan to convert this story to some kind of cartoon or something? |
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Giftorcurse
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| Posted: Sun May 06, 2012 7:52 pm Post subject: |
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If I write the book and it gets attention, I'd see it as a Hayao Miyazaki film.
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PastFixations
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Okay, does she play a more significant role like being captured by the Zentarans or Zaur... Something so that Ryuhei would save her or is there a female in the story that Ryuhei has a love interest?
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Giftorcurse
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There is a love interest in the form of Lana, but its fairly chaste, and they keep it professional. Maybe in the sequel...
Junko is a scientist, possibly with some medical training. She could be a supervisor for Stardust.
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Chaosrising
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You could add something new or unexpected to the story. something that changes the outcome to the reader's eyes.
An uprising within the attacking army post assassination.
A third party stumbles into the mix. |
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Giftorcurse
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| Chaosrising wrote: | You could add something new or unexpected to the story. something that changes the outcome to the reader's eyes...
...A third party stumbles into the mix. |
MIBs.
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PastFixations
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| Giftorcurse wrote: | | Chaosrising wrote: | You could add something new or unexpected to the story. something that changes the outcome to the reader's eyes...
...A third party stumbles into the mix. |
MIBs. |
Men In Black?
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Giftorcurse
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Yup.
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