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What do you think about my poem?
literary epic 50%  50%  [ 2 ]
good 50%  50%  [ 2 ]
average 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
bad 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
deserves to be banned from writing 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Total votes : 4

Villette
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07 Mar 2010, 11:03 am

The inner tongue shapes events.
Far from the clattering crowd of noise
Far from the eyes of sneering predators,
Thriving on the fruit of intellect.
The writer sits and thinks, the fingers dart
Moulding the stateliness of written words,
Subtler than the scenes of flesh-bared sights.
Unearthlier than the graces of instinct,
Preying on the silent, brooding ones.
Years of thought and philosophy
Fill the souls of neglected shadows –
Who pause, reflect, - and with quickened pulse, write –
A rhapsody of hidden words, a juvenile enterprise,
The heart and soul of a forsaken soul’s paradise.



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07 Mar 2010, 11:22 am

Best poem I've read on the Internet for a very long time.


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07 Mar 2010, 1:27 pm

It's beautiful.



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07 Mar 2010, 2:41 pm

It's difficult for me rating art. It's a reflection of what you feel, you're passionate about it, so it's good, no matter what others think.

The question is whether you managed to put some thoughts or sense of relating to others when they read it.
My answer: definitely. Written beautifully in my eyes. Both art-wise and emotion-wise.

Please keep writing and expressing it.



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08 Mar 2010, 6:55 am

Thanks! :D I rarely get these spurts of inspiration though ...