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16 Sep 2015, 5:42 pm

This is my poem.

Ode to the Great Pumpkin

Great Pumpkin, you are Halloween's answer
To Santa Claus.
I come to you with a request-
Restore innocence to all of us everywhere.

Although no one can see you,
You are visible in my and Linus' hearts.
I come to sing pumpkin carols
And revel in your runner-up status to the Easter Bunny.

My pumpkin patch is very sincere this year,
Demonstrating simplicity.
O Great Pumpkin, where are you?
I am hoping for your arrival on Halloween night,
Without any sign of hypocrisy.



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19 Sep 2015, 3:55 pm

I've lost interest in the story I had been working on, then let drop for a time. So the other night, I started on a story I had been working on a year ago but lost interest in, and it seems to be working out. Hopefully, the previous story will be resurrected given enough time for me to give myself some rest from it.


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26 Sep 2015, 9:06 am

Here is the link to the sci-fi story I am currently working on.
https://onedrive.live.com/redir?resid=E ... ile%2cdocx

The draft is just over 10,000 words so far.

The story takes place in another Solar System known as the Altanis System. A reptilian alien race known as the Reptiloid Empire, with superior technology and intelligence, is believed to want to take over the entire system, however many skeptics believe they have other goals in mind (hint: this is true. They aren't trying to take over the galaxy, they have another reason).

So far they have invaded and enslaved 2 different planets of the system and now control 3, out of 11.

They invaded a planet known as Destiny in the First Invasion of Destiny. Destiny's government and the entire planet as a whole was left in absolute ruin and destruction. The majority of Destiny's environ emental life went extinct.

However, the Reptiloid Empire were scared-off by a rebellion. The rebellion successfully managed to prove an effective resistence to the Reptiloid Empire.

After the Reptiloid Empire left, the Rebellion, being the most powerful form of military left on the planet, decided to declare themselves the de-facto rulers of Destiny.

Overtime, the Rebellion had also become more militarized and organized, and is now nearly on par with a normal military.

Also, it should be noted that the Rebellion are MULTI-SPECIES and aren't just made up of humans.

Destiny has it's own time system (year/month/day, D for Destiny time), it's own language, and 'rebellion'-based culture that will pop up in the story from time to time.

Even though the rebellion had scared-off the Reptiloid's, they have been fighting them in space and on other worlds for years now, along with their allies the Wagnarok species from the nearby planet of Wagnus V. The most major of these was the Callista Campaign, which you can find details of it in Chapter 3.

The story begins at the very start of the Second Invasion of Destiny, in which the Reptiloid Empire commit their second invasion of Destiny against the rebellion. It started immediately after the Callista Campaign ends.

There IS NO good and evil in this story. The Rebellion and Wagnarok's are initially portrayed as 'good' and the Reptiloid's as 'evil', however more will be revealed to show they are all shades of grey. However, none of this has been written yet, so there are NO clues so far, and you WILL assume there is good and evil at first.

P.S. It gets very disorganized and messy after Chapter 3 due to still being edited.



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28 Sep 2015, 4:17 pm

Sounds quite interesting, Outrider. None of my heroes and villains are ever black and white.


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30 Sep 2015, 7:37 am

Thank you. What about you, Karaudo777. I've heard you mention writing, so you don't have anything online or anything to share?



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02 Oct 2015, 9:06 am

All of my stuff is hand-written, and I just can't seem to get around to typing the whole trilogy out [plus all the bonus stuff].
I do have poetry in a little notebook, however, so if anyone's interested I can probably type a couple out. I've started an epic poem called Transcendence and I'm on Part 5 of 17 so far.


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02 Oct 2015, 10:01 am

Since realising that there was more going on in life than I noticed (and understanding a bit better why things would lead to me getting frustrated), I have worked on some personal improvements. Recently I've had a bit more free time so have being looking at some courses and books on speaking, communication skills, mindfulness etc. This seems to be making some improvements in my life, so I want to carry it on further. I've always thought about trying to have some more creative hobbies, like writing, drawing or photography, but for a while I have not carried through on this.

To help me express myself more and to help with coming up with ideas, thoughts and more interesting ways of saying them, I thought I would use this thread as motivation and an outlet to put down some of my writings. So here goes for my first piece of creative writing, a poem I have called The Persuaders:

I walks in, enter the place, feel the pressure
In and out fast and don’t respond
Do not talk, do not see, noticing everything yet taking in nothing
Intensity rising
Two persuaders come
One bony and cold in its long, crooked stovepipe hat, its skeletal limbs grasping from tattered suit
The other, fiery
A ghoul, sneaking behind in its cape

They whisper in my ear to spill their toxic words
A doubter
I walk through
The vortex swells inside, the blood infused with lava, expands, pulsating, pressure everywhere, intense
The babble gets louder, but the words twist around each other and suck the walls in closer
Don’t look, don’t see, don’t speak
I am trapped in my island, everything bubbling up, unable to focus
In out fast, don’t respond
Run out, run out, run out

Everyone looks, but I bare nothing, silence within
The Persuaders whisper again, look down, move on
Think of something to say, think of something to say, you can’t, they won’t like
That preparation, out of reach, filled somewhere else, the path not known
The work is never enough
Escape, release
Over

Grow from the island,
Grow into the surroundings
Grow be the pacific
Breathe more, relax
Harmony and balance

Walk in, enter the place
A look, a glance
It’s understood
Relaxed, open
Smile some more

See inside, see clear
Colours, life and the ocean floor
Finish a sentence, a thought
A pause, a response
Even a smile

The door stays shut
They don’t come out
Not much, a little
A start
Enough



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20 Oct 2015, 4:46 am

Shadow and Light

I saw your sandaled little feet,
stepped into view of your yellow little window;
A cosy little box,
shining like dozens of others on your sleeping flat.

I saw your porcelain little hands,
stroking across page after page;
A cultured woman,
if not sleepy.

I saw your slim little body,
clad under a gown enjoying the joy and warmth
inside your cosy little box;
And across the fifty meters of winter night air,
you warmed me.

You were the light and I was the shadow;
You saw from above but you wouldn't see, never noticed,
as I watched from the shade beneath;
Did you see what I see, my partner of fate,
of the shadows below the feet under your feet?
As your fine fingers turned the pages,
did it tell of slate basement room,
walled in at a forsaken corner on asphalt smelled of dried spits,
where I rested with rabbles and scums,
where I gazed the grey ceiling, at you?

But the car came in,
passing by my outpost without a glance;
Your yellow world flickered
as the man joined you;
Night in, day out.
And the chill breezes calmed my dream,
bringing upon me the silent reminder
of the difference of existence;
The light belongs to the light;
The night belongs to the night.

But you were always my light,
as I was your shadow;
Unseverable, inescapable,
I would be there wherever you are,
wherever you hag,
wherever you read,
wherever you wail,
wherever I touched your tears behind a security screen,
as you left from the doors I opened
unnoticed,
unknown,
forgotten.



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20 Oct 2015, 8:05 am

Wow! What an awesome poem, Woodpecker!
Here's the first two chapters of my first book if anyone's interested:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rKYUv5NqlagyHHot-djx6pvnqsMvLnqFbqdXWjiszUM/edit


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21 Oct 2015, 6:52 am

One of the reasons I felt that I wasn't diagnosed properly many years ago was because my poem that I wrote about depression/anxiety/bipolar/mania didn't resonate with ANYBODY who also had those things. I knew something wasn't right.

Maybe it will resonate with people her, or maybe it's just me, which is also fine...

I wrote this probably over ten years ago now, shortly after going back on Prozac (which is one of the only things that ever helped my depression and social issues even a little, but it dulls my three-track mind into one relatively shallow feeling one - I'm not on it at this time, and when I was I had to use the liquid kind and take a child's dose):



tangles of tightly wound electrical wires
each carrying it's own pulse
spark
touched wrong an electric jolt throughout your entire body
another touch and nothing but numbness
that somehow lacks peace
a jumble of black and red and white
no more
no less
frayed ends displaying copper points begging to touch the tip of your tongue
a speedy sensation
a headrush
fingers tingly
sparkling
like white grape juice in a glass
a fraction of a second you hear a child's laughter
turning tinny
to the chiming and ringing of bells
in your ears
as it all fades back into a sudden buzzing jolt
of awareness
stillness
quiet
and you notice your brain is still
you listen
but there is nothing
you wait to feel something
but it doesn't come
you take a breath
look around
put your hands in your pockets
and just walk away


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21 Oct 2015, 7:02 am

Kuraudo777 wrote:
Wow! What an awesome poem, Woodpecker!
Here's the first two chapters of my first book if anyone's interested:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rKYUv5NqlagyHHot-djx6pvnqsMvLnqFbqdXWjiszUM/edit


I just wanted to let you know that I'm reading this now and really enjoying it! You made it easy to care abut the characters right away, which is important! :D


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21 Oct 2015, 8:35 am

Oh, thank you! That makes me so happy and more than a little embarrassed! I'm going to type the next chapter today, so stay tuned! :) I'll warn you right up front, though: there are loads and loads of characters and a couple tragic deaths and nightmare fuel later on [but also a lot of funny moments, so it kind of balances out]!


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21 Oct 2015, 8:46 am

Kuraudo777 wrote:
Oh, thank you! That makes me so happy and more than a little embarrassed! I'm going to type the next chapter today, so stay tuned! :) I'll warn you right up front, though: there are loads and loads of characters and a couple tragic deaths and nightmare fuel later on [but also a lot of funny moments, so it kind of balances out]!


You must be good at writing because I am not a visual/picture thinker, I think in words - like, I hear my own voice talking in my head usually - but when I read good writing, including your story, a picture sort of paints itself in my mind. I can easily see your story being made into an animated series or movie or something, depending on how the story develops.

The other thing that took me by surprise is the fact that I don't normally get interested in fantasy/sci fi but I really wanted to keep reading your story. So it seems to have a wider appeal or else I probably would have gotten bored which didn't happen. :) I'm excited to keep an eye on this thread to read updates!


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21 Oct 2015, 9:15 am

I don't think I'd like it to be a movie since then everyone would watch the movie instead of reading the book, although I would like an audio book to be made some day. A lot of people tell me that they can see it in their minds when they read my stuff. So what's your first impressions? Also, pay attention to everything that is said since there are loads of clues about things that happen later on even in the first few chapters!


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21 Oct 2015, 1:57 pm

Kuraudo777 wrote:
Wow! What an awesome poem, Woodpecker!
Here's the first two chapters of my first book if anyone's interested:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rKYUv5NqlagyHHot-djx6pvnqsMvLnqFbqdXWjiszUM/edit

Thx man. I wrote it in a gated residence where I work as a security guard. It is not real, of course, but nothing is as vivid and inspiring as the scenery just outside my post, and the nights are long:)

I also wrote this. Feel free to give your comments:
http://mokninart.tumblr.com/post/119587 ... terrogator



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22 Oct 2015, 7:05 am

Kuraudo777 wrote:
I don't think I'd like it to be a movie since then everyone would watch the movie instead of reading the book, although I would like an audio book to be made some day. A lot of people tell me that they can see it in their minds when they read my stuff. So what's your first impressions? Also, pay attention to everything that is said since there are loads of clues about things that happen later on even in the first few chapters!


That makes a lot of sense about wanting to keep it in written form so that people take it in the way that you intended.

My first impression was to think Sivian was an imaginary friend. Next was to think that he was real but still invisible to anyone but her. Third impression was that he will end up being her brother. Fourth was that she will go most of the book thinking he is her brother but will fall in love sort of anyway and near the end find that they're not really related and can go ahead and be a couple. Of course, chances are that none of these are right, which is the fun of reading a story - being surprised at what happens! :)


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