APPLICATION ESSAY

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The name says it all. After going through all of the questions online, I get stuck on the essay part.

Just to specify:
"Describe the personal experience that gave you the feeling of greatest achievement or satisfaction because of the challenges you met"

What I desire to state:
"I shall describe the [most extroverted thing, maybe a speech I did] that gave me the feeling of satisfaction because of the [Aspergers with ADHD]"

However, I need some expertise on how this might (or might not) work.

This is a good idea. I went through all of this application stuff this summer, so I know what you are going through. One thing I would recommend is writing a good outline- make sure all of your thoughts connect before you write stuff down so you don't get frustrated. Also, what you writen here is fairly dry, and I don't know what your writing style is, but I would suggest you try to 'show' not 'tell' how you felt. This means giving details that use sensory information that make the reader connect to and feel what you are trying to get across. I love editing, ( I edit my Mom's PhD papers) so feel free to e-mail a copy of what you've got.

I may actually start off with my experience in a 6-8 year old cameo choir for a sappy Celine Dion song "Let's Talk About Love", discussing my prevailing desire to perform over someone considered, and still in some ways, "antisocial". Staying fairly but not too optimistic is probably a good idea. Also, it is a good idea to elaborate on the desire for uniqueness and individuality, along with the edification of others in high school.

"...the desire for uniqueness and individuality..."develope that some more and that's a great thesis right there. You could totally write an entrance essay around that!

this is the part of the application that I am actually good at (so I was told), so here are some things that helped me:

-first, start writing when you are completely relaxed. Just write everything that comes to mind, don't worry about grammar, content, anything else at this point. Just let your subconsciousness do the talking.
-repeat this until you feel that you said everything you had to say.
-read over what you wrote--not with a critical eye, but rather just to get a sense if you see any common themes emerging.
-create a rough outline
-write another essay, following your outline but at the same time borrowing things from your earlier drafts
-have someone else edit your essay. do it several times, until you have a polished version.

College application essays tend to be difficult because of there vagueness for broad use. Relax, write out what you want to say in any formate (outline, blog, whatever), take what you wrote and process it into a coherent essay, and if possible has someone read over it.