This isn't a series I'm familiar with, so to understand what's going on better in your story ( me being a bit dumb -probably due to age ) I need a little bit more information .
Quote:
"Mommy? What are you doing?" Micah Sanders stopped and crossed his arms. "You're supposed to take me to school, remember?"
Briefly- who is Micah ? Does he have special powers, and has his mum just found out- this is a key point in a story like yours, the build up to the moment where a normal parent learns about the abilities of their child and also the danger they are in.
Sylar - is he a bad guy - has he killed the woman on the floor? Does Micah think he is in similar danger from Sylar ?
Who is Issac Mendez - why is the painting so important to him?
I think you have a structure for a story made from key points, images, and if you can expand on these-so someone like me , who doesn't know the characters or the storyline can identify
with them, then I'd be interested in reading further.
I think it a bit unfair to ask if your writing is good or bad , for two reasons
1. As I said in the above I simply don't know enough about the story to know if I like it. My liking or disliking what anyone else writes isn't a reflection of their writing, it's personal choice
so I'd never use the terms good or bad .
2. When I read a piece of work, say like Slaughterhouse -Five , or Tom Wolf's short stories or Heart Of Darkness I sometimes want to give up writing , but I guess by overcoming that feeling and trying to write better is the way you learn.
05 Aug 2011, 1:22 pm
I have seen parts of it.
