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http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7241977/1/Different_Paths
If you don't like/have watched the show, I only want a review on my writing. But if you do/have watched the show, I would also like to know if this is a good idea or not. Is it overused? I think its good though , but there is so many bad writers on FFN that I need concrit.

I've only watched a little of the Heroes show, so I don't know that much about it, but I have watched it randomly and have a shallow understanding of the storyline you bring up in it, but disregarding my poor knowledge in it, otherwise, chapter 2 and 3 are, overall, rather well written, although I think in need of more character and environmental details, to give the reader a better picture of things, while reading... the first chapter, however, isn't particulary interesting. Also, I think you should give a bit more "flow" to how you write, here... it's a bit too segmented. You also have some grammatical errors, but nothing that was that bothersome... mainly the misuse of commas.

You use good wording, at places; especially in the later part of the third chapter... I think it looks pretty promising; especially since you point out that you write it with a time limit, in a library.