i wrote an exciting one: In The Wake of her Ecstacy

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check this song out, and if you have a hard time following at all go to this link and click on the little music tab on the top:

http://areverieinpassing.tumblr.com/pos ... ther-didnt


In The Wake of Her Ecstasy

Everywhere I go
I see people who only care about what they want
I kinda relate to that
But then I wish I cared about what I need

Of all the things I know
Not all of them are what I learned on a chalkboard
But there is one thing that would make me better if I’d only
learned it first

The world is so beautiful
Without the cars Without their crazy radios
Every ground we walked on
Would be fine if weren’t always full of paved roads
Full of lust and addiction and hate
And even if we can’t get rid of regret
Someday I wanna be that girl
Who’s okay with virtually nothing
In the wake of her ecstasy.

Everywhere I go
I see laughter controversy in all the wrong places
I could suck up to any of it
Cuz anyone my generation knows is prone to taking everything for granted

Of all the things I know
Not all of them are what I learned on a chalkboard
But there is one thing that would make me better if I’d only
learned it first

The world is so beautiful
Without the cars Without their crazy radios
Every ground we walked on
Would be fine if weren’t always full of paved roads
Full of lust and addiction and hate
And even if we can’t get rid of regret
Someday I wanna be that girl
Who’s okay with virtually nothing
In the wake of her ecstasy.

Could it be that I’m asking for too much
Everybody keeps saying we only live once
Well guess what we aren’t all under the same roof
With our own beliefs
Guessing the final countdown

I feel so afraid
Just seeing the world waste away
It’s enough that we’re a disaster
All of us
just saying that we care is not enough..0.
(improvise and repeat chorus to desired length)

Beautiful....just beautiful

thx cinbad, and i love your signature by the way! Too bad it can't be quoted directly.

just fyi for everyone, i just felt like getting across just plain directly put in stone of "take everything for granted," especially in this day and age.
That's really the core thing that defines the reason why me, among mostly likely more people than I realize, are wanting to be less materialistic, less full of themselves and careless, whatever drives them to just not give a damn and walk this earth and do what they want with their lives like it's no big deal.

essentially i kicked off the song with the very first verse because it was a late night, i was inspired to use a very basic lyrical pattern and as i typed it up just the idea of me wanting to someday 'be that girl' who is happy just with the moment, what she's stuck with in life (that seems interpreted to be nothing but in a way it's like doing without the excessiveness of other things).

so, i'd still like to get more thoughts coming my way, but that's pretty much what i was going for.

thanks again down below, i was hoping this would work out!

Your voice sounded very shaky in that recording, and also a little forced. You actually sounded kind of nervous. Your voice has potential though! Just try to relax and let your voice flow smoothly. Perhaps it'd be better to record at a time when you can raise your voice more.

It's good, but it reminds me more of poetry or prose than lyrics. Just my opinion.