Critique my OK Cupid Proilfe Round 2

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i think his issue is he is lonely!

I guess I have nothing constructive to offer, but you're really cute! ^_^

The photos are much better! Except the one with an intern. She looks angry or like she doesn't want to be there.
Other photos are great, especially the last one. Very playful.

The profile part. Use paragraphs for easier reading.

And I also think that "I am slender like a runner, but don't let that fool you..." part is a bit creepy. But since it was suggested to you by a female member, I guess it would read well for some women.

That was my fault. It was my suggestion.

Brian, apparently my sense of humour is not representative of the general female population (now there's a surprise - not). Everyone else seems to think my joke was "creepy." I just thought it was mischievous. So apparently you should delete it.

If you don't make jokes naturally on your own then it might give off a false impression to include them in your profile, anyway.

It looks better and the group photo really adds charm.

Take out the line "I've been told I need to describe more about my personality," instead just do your best at describing your personality. The discription of your personality is not bad. In place of "I've been told I need to describe more about my personality, which I admit is a challenge. If I had to describe myself, I'd say I'm ..." I would go strait into saying "I am eager to please ..."

To make it easier to read break up "my self-summary" and "what I am doing with my life" into more discrete paragraphs, and have an empty line between paragraphs. This helps divide up the information into discrete topics and draws the eyes to each section of information. (see how I break up the paragraphs in this post).

For the line "But I'm not such a health nut, that I can't enjoy the occasional quarter pounder, or a scoop of homemade frozen custard." the beginning of the sentence is off. I suggest "While I enjoy running, I also enjoy the occasional ..."

No need to put your personal best times for running on your profile. Leave that off so you can talk about it in a message if a girl likes running too. Just say you like running etc, and what distances you run.

The "I'm really good at" and "Favorite books, movies, shows, music, and food" sections are well done. Good job with having interesting pictures with you and the camera.

Good luck.

Rice isn't a vegetable.

I don't think a dating site is the right medium for your message

Far better to join film-making forums and go to film-related events so you can meet with like-minded people

In my experience, most people on dating sites are not that intellectual or perhaps you need to join a more specialist dating site
for young professionals or film-makers etc?

Either way, I'd say you're intellectually above most of your audience.

hahahahaha < that was for "I am slender like a runner" which is, if I were single, on that site, lived in Kansas, and had heard from you, the SOLE reason I would have been interested. I think that's funny and if that's your sense of humor you should stick with it.

However, I would have questioned the high and tight pants and mock turtleneck. But if that's how you dress, you should stick with that as well. There's no reason to try to fool people that you dress in a different style. Nerd core is cool too in its own way.

That being said, what I think you should seriously change is all the information you've included on your profile. That's because if a girl is interested in you, she's gonna feel like she knows everything there is to know about you just by reading what you put up. There's nothing left to ask you. You could shave down the "What I'm Doing With My Life" section to say you work on documentaries, animation...and then put down a couple other things. This would be intriguing and a girl would be like oo! I want to hear more about this! So you can message back and forth about it.

I'm not a girl so I wouldn't know if there are enough girls out there who actually would find you interesting based on such a long drawn out profile. Reading your profile bores the hell out of me to be honest. TMI and redundancy.

Also this:

Too desperate.

I thought it was interesting but unlikely to appeal to a lot of people as they would lack the intellect to appreciate the film and director references etc

No, he's just being open and honest, which is a good trait to have

Asking people on a forum for their opinion on you is asking for trouble in my opinion as every smart arse in the vicinity will
queue up to put a downer on you

I think you come across as a very interesting person

I think it still says too much about film-making on your profile. Most people's profiles talk about their career in one little sentence, like this:

"I'm a XYZ by profession"

and then move on to talking about something else. Your profile still seems to be talking mainly about your passion for making films.

I don't think there's anything wrong with that per se, but unless the person reading your profile is also passionate about making films, they may find it rather boring. As somebody else suggested, maybe you should try joining film-making forums instead of dating websites.

Appreciating film and director references has nothing to do with intellect.

Also, he is asking for a critique, and I am giving him my opinion accordingly. After all, isn't honesty (as you say) a good thing?

I take it you're obsessed with film OP?

While having an intense passion is great, I'm never sure when I see guys like you if they're willing to date anyone who doesn't share their interests as intensely, and if they are willing whether I'd even fit into their life plan.

Your photos are ok. Your dress sense seems very smart casual and neat. I'd give away the grey skivvy to goodwill though but that's just my tastes.