16 Sep 2009, 8:39 pm
i'm rather excited about it anyway 
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"Change of Heart"
A heart of stone you ground to dust
and breathed life into with your trust
it changed me and brought such great joy
so shocked at first it seemed a ploy
from dust to clay a vessel shaped
but filled with holes and cracks that gaped
my earthen heart was fragile yet
still none inside it came to let
but in you seeped like molten gold
you drowned my doubts and took firm hold
securely settled deep inside
the brilliant warmth solidified
it's fractured shell then fell away
a perfect whole where it had lay
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16 Sep 2009, 8:55 pm
I love it and I have no doubt that you wrote it. Have you thought about writing song lyrics? You've got the knack for it. 
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16 Sep 2009, 9:45 pm
yep, your in love alright! 
very good poem, I apprecated the molten gold imagery, warm, rich and glowing.
Merle
16 Sep 2009, 10:22 pm
Thanks Tim & Zen
very good poem, I apprecated the molten gold imagery, warm, rich and glowing.
Merle
16 Sep 2009, 11:49 pm
But all it is, is poetry set to music. You have to tell a story with words that someone can relate to. That's what you do well.
17 Sep 2009, 12:03 am
But all it is, is poetry set to music. You have to tell a story with words that someone can relate to. That's what you do well.
but lyrics are usually longer and have more repetition, choruses, etc.
as is i'm not sure how good've music this would make though
17 Sep 2009, 2:36 am
135 views so far and very few comments.
hmm, i gotta wonder ...
17 Sep 2009, 4:59 am
hmm, i gotta wonder
...Sometimes people aren't in the mood (e.g. I didn't vote) for poetry. Not a reflection on your endeavor.
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17 Sep 2009, 7:54 am
hmm, i gotta wonder
...If you sold your poetry, you would sell many copies and get much fewer comments. . .
just sayin'
17 Sep 2009, 1:55 pm
hmm, i gotta wonder
...Sometimes people aren't in the mood (e.g. I didn't vote) for poetry. Not a reflection on your endeavor.
i'm just surprised there's so many lurkers on the forum is all
17 Sep 2009, 2:01 pm
hmm, i gotta wonder
...If you sold your poetry, you would sell many copies and get much fewer comments. . .
just sayin'
but if it were sell-able that'd be awesome. i could use the money =D
saving up for a car =P.
but as i understand it, there's not much of a profitable market for poetry =/...
being a poetry writer is almost equivalent to starving artist status
even starving artists make more because it's easier to appreciate something visual right away than actually take the time to read something
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