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DyL
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21 Nov 2011, 3:21 am

Not really in need of help, just wanted to share this cute poem the girl I like just sent me . <3

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I really like you and you like me too
There's something about you that makes you different
You're nice, kind, sweet and you make me laugh
I think about you, before I go to sleep
Whenever I think about you it makes me smile.

It's been a few weeks since I've seen you
And I miss you a lot. I want to see you
So much has happened since,
The last time we saw each other,
We've both found out we liked each other

When I talk to you, I get these butterflies
Butterflies in my tummy and it's not funny
I can't help it, I feel so different now.
It's not a bad feeling, it's a good one
I don't want to lose you now

I haven't ever felt this way before
This feeling is so new to me.
But I like this feeling,
Sometimes it doesn't feel real.
But then I talk to you and I know it is

I never thought you would like me back,
But there was always this hope I had.
Then my dream came true, you liked me back.
I don't want to get hurt though,
And I am scared that maybe I will.

But I still have these feelings for you,
I don't know if anything will change that.
I don't want to expect anything
And then be disappointed in the end
But maybe something will happen with us

Is it too early to fall for you?
If I fall for you, would you catch me?
Because I don't want to fall for you
And lose everything because you didn't catch me

But I like you now and you like me...
And maybe that the way it's meant to be
"I love you" is too early to say
But never know what can happen.



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21 Nov 2011, 4:34 am

Romantic love is something to be treasured.

I am happy for you.



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21 Nov 2011, 9:11 am

DyL wrote:
Not really in need of help, just wanted to share this cute poem the girl I like just sent me . <3

Quote:
I really like you and you like me too
There's something about you that makes you different
You're nice, kind, sweet and you make me laugh
I think about you, before I go to sleep
Whenever I think about you it makes me smile.

It's been a few weeks since I've seen you
And I miss you a lot. I want to see you
So much has happened since,
The last time we saw each other,
We've both found out we liked each other

When I talk to you, I get these butterflies
Butterflies in my tummy and it's not funny
I can't help it, I feel so different now.
It's not a bad feeling, it's a good one
I don't want to lose you now

I haven't ever felt this way before
This feeling is so new to me.
But I like this feeling,
Sometimes it doesn't feel real.
But then I talk to you and I know it is

I never thought you would like me back,
But there was always this hope I had.
Then my dream came true, you liked me back.
I don't want to get hurt though,
And I am scared that maybe I will.

But I still have these feelings for you,
I don't know if anything will change that.
I don't want to expect anything
And then be disappointed in the end
But maybe something will happen with us

Is it too early to fall for you?
If I fall for you, would you catch me?
Because I don't want to fall for you
And lose everything because you didn't catch me

But I like you now and you like me...
And maybe that the way it's meant to be
"I love you" is too early to say
But never know what can happen.


I'd say that's a very romantic poem however I have a few critiques, the poem does have a childlike and innocent authenticity to it but I feel it lacks intensity, conviction and abstraction. As someone who likes poetry very much, I would say you need to revisit this poem.



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21 Nov 2011, 9:22 am

Wolfheart wrote:
critique

*cough* he received the poem from a girl, he didn't write it *cough*



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21 Nov 2011, 9:27 am

so beautiful you got that from a girl, OP. <3



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21 Nov 2011, 9:28 am

hyperlexian wrote:
*cough* he received the poem from a girl, he didn't write it *cough*


Oh right, I thought he was sending it to a girl, another awkward moment in a day of the life of mine. Anyway it's a very heartfelt, thoughtful and cute poem.



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21 Nov 2011, 10:57 am

i really like the crying smile face



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21 Nov 2011, 2:35 pm

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"You're nice, kind, sweet and you make me laugh"


Is that really all there is to it? O.o


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21 Nov 2011, 3:28 pm

That is cute, I think you both should spend time together and see how it pans out. Don't push yourselves in the deep as you both are new to it all.



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23 Nov 2011, 1:06 pm

Redacted



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23 Nov 2011, 2:14 pm

nat4200 wrote:
OneStepBeyond wrote:
i really like the crying smile face

I think the apostrophe represents a nose rather than a tear, an underscore would be one tear, as in :_)

say it isn't so



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23 Nov 2011, 3:11 pm

nat4200 wrote:
I think the apostrophe represents a nose rather than a tear, an underscore would be one tear, as in :_)


Is that a joke? I assume you're aware of the hyphen key on your keyboard.



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23 Nov 2011, 3:59 pm

Wonder where she found it...



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23 Nov 2011, 11:37 pm

she found it by drawing a treasure map and following it towards the treasure



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23 Nov 2011, 11:55 pm

DyL wrote:
Not really in need of help, just wanted to share this cute poem the girl I like just sent me . <3


That's really nice of her. Hope you have fun, however long or short it lasts.