Original Poetry for the Romantic Types

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Thread for poetry to tell somebody you like how you feel about them.

Here's mine;

Ever faster breathing,
Breaths intertwined,
Like our limbs struggle,
Nearest our flesh can find.

Eyes locked on mutual tangent,
Souls speak instant acceptance,
Message of eternity,
Promise of chance.

Breathing breaks,
Continuance ceases,
Pleasure,
Pleases.

Moment,
Forever,
Parting,
Never.

If one wish we could share,
As one,
Do you think we could dare,
Forever.

Could replace one of the forevers with together. I think poetry is better when you don't use a word twice unless it is common like "the" and "it".
Surprised that Wolfheart hasn't said anything here yet, normally he would be one who would have an input in poetry.