Well, still stuck on my current scene in my story that I have been for months on end. I think I may have gotten the scene in question sorted out at last. Ill post it, but I really need opinions on it before I make my decision. I am not worried about grammar/spelling at the moment, as I will be going through the chapter and correct stuff after I finish it.
(Hate copying onto forums, formatting gets all screwy and is near impossible to fix :/
"Finally..." Karin mumbled as she stepped out of the elevator and into Milliardo's penthouse, pistol at the ready. The penthouse was spacious, with its marble floors and walls. Various sculptures and other pieces of art were displayed all around the entryway. At the other end was a staircase that led up to the level above.
Karin made her way up the stairs and looked around. The floor was transparent in this area, exposing the entry-hall beneath. Yet more art was on display, and halls shot off to the left and right. A few chairs and a large couch were arranged around a holo-display, and on the opposite side of it was an area set aside as a dining and cooking area. At the end of the room was a desk surrounded by bookcases and monitors. Milliardo sitting in the chair, his hands clasped as he looked at Karin at the opposite end of the hall.
"You are gone to die for what you have done Milliardo!" Karin yelled as she walked towards him. "You are nothing but a monster!"
"So.... you interrupt my game of solitaire just so say that, and then what? Are you going to kill me?" Milliardo responded, a look of amusement crossing his face. "You really should think about what you are doing."
"This isn't a f*****g game! Everything you are doing is just wrong!", Karin yelled, and stood at the desk, the pistol aimed squarely at Milliardo's face.
"Well, I am shaking in my boots, aren't I?" Milliardo said with a laugh. "You have absolutely no Ide..."
Karin fired the pistol, striking Milliardo in the face. Where is head was there was just a mass of destroyed circuitry. "s**t!" Karin yelled as she made her was pack down to the elevator door. She kept on hitting the button, but nothing happened. "Piece of s**t work!" she yelled, pounding the control panel even harder. She then noticed that her vision was blurring and that she felt weak and drowsy. She looked about and noticed a fog coming from the vents, then immediately passed out.
Her vision returned as she found herself in front of the desk again. The robot was still in the chair where she left it, but then she heard footsteps behind her. A feeling of dread, of fear crept through her and she tried to turn around and stand up. She let out a scream as she found that she was tied to the seat she was in.
"Now now, be quiet..." a voice sounded from behind Karin. "You tried to kill me a multitude of times. I really should just kill you right here and now, don't you think?"
"Milliardo, stop this! You know it is wrong, you have got to know it is!" Karin yelled as she struggled against the bindings.
"Shh.... everything will be alright..." Milliardo said in a calm voice. He reached out and brushed his hand against Karin's cheek. Well, lets just say I am not interested in shedding blood, you have no idea how much it costs to remove it from these suits. My favorite color is white you know."
A tear tolled down Karin's face as she tried to hold them back. "Why are you doing this?! The naturals haven't done anything!"
Milliardo stopped in front of her and stooped down to face level. "You really have no idea. Everyone still remembers the attacks your kind have waged on us in the past as well as the present war."
"We are fighting for our freedom and right damn it! You f*****g Modifieds decided to treat us like animals, and ya know what? You deserve the casualties!" Karin yelled, then spit in Milliardo's face.
Milliardo stood up and pulled out a handkerchief from a pocket and wiped off his face. He then backhanded Karin, pain shooting through her face. "And here I was hoping this would be a peaceful discussion." He backhanded her yet again and a third time then stopped. Karin was crying in pain now and Milliardo walked towards the window. "Look at it all. We have given them peace and good health, but you and your friends have robbed them of that. Regardless however, everything has gone according to plan. You, The Children of Gaia, and Transcendent won't get in my way."
Who is Transcendent?" Karin asked, holding back a cry a pain.
"Just another group that has been a thorn in my side. They haven't done anything yet, and In my opinion they are who you all should really be worrying about. As for my own motives, starting a war is sometimes the only way to get two sides to reconcile and unite against an even greater threat. Your trying to kill me has gotten in the way of that. Milliardo then grabbed a pistol off of the desk, aimed it squarely at Karin's left temple, and fired.
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