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18 Apr 2007, 11:10 am

I need help with this song! here it is (its dealing with an aspie boy (me) and some random girl)
She holds a velvet moth between here hands
Now its not a search for any old love
I'd never take advatage of any human-being
I can't understand the feeling!
I want a photograph of me hold her so tight
and have it last till its black and white
---------------------------------------------------
If I had to choose
I wish life was like a rubix cube*
cause i would never loose
impossible to figure out
but all the same without a doubt
---------------------------------------------------

Thats the way I want it to be
locks on hearts with me having the key
to open them all! How I have longed
to see your eyes, away from all the people that have wronged
me! It has been so long

thats all i got and at the * note i cant actually do rubix cubes

Last edited by Kcihtred2 on 18 Apr 2007, 11:18 am, edited 1 time in total.

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18 Apr 2007, 11:17 am

Lemme give it a go...

Kcihtred2 wrote:

She holds a velvet moth between her hands
Now it's not a search for any old love
I'd never take advantage of any human-being
I can't understand the emotion I'm feeling!
I want a photograph of me holding her tight
And have it last till its black and white
---------------------------------------------------
If I could have a choice to choose
I wish life was like a Rubik's Cube
And that's because I would never lose
Impossible to figure out
But all the same without a doubt
---------------------------------------------------

I fixed the spelling mistakes and punctuation and stuff for ya. I'm not sure if it's an improvement, but it was fun to do anyway!

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18 Apr 2007, 11:20 am

k now heres what i have now:
I need help with this song! here it is (its dealing with an aspie boy (me) and some random girl) \

She holds a velvet moth between here hands
Now its not a search for any old love
I'd never take advatage of any human-being
I can't understand the emotion I'm feeling!
I want a photograph of me holding her so tight
and have it last till its black and white
---------------------------------------------------
If I could have a choice tochoose
I wish life was like a rubix cube*
cause i would never loose
impossible to figure out
but all the same without a doubt
---------------------------------------------------

Thats the way I want it to be
locks on hearts with me having the key
to open them all! How I have longed
to see your eyes, away from all the people that have wronged
me! It has been so long

thats all i got and at the * note i cant actually do rubix cubes

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18 Apr 2007, 11:29 am

Kcihtred2 wrote:

Thats the way I want it to be
Locks on hearts with me holding the key
To open them all! How I have longed
To see your eyes, away from all that have wronged
Me! It has been so long

*is waiting for the next part for me to edit*
This is fun! Do you mind at all?

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I was sad when I found that she left
But then I found
That I could speak to her,
In a way
And sadness turned to comfort
We all go there

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18 Apr 2007, 11:32 am

thanks guys this is probally going to be the final draft! unless someone comes up with something else within 24 hours:
She holds a velvet moth between here hands
Now its not a search for any old love
I'd never take advatage of any human-being
I can't understand the emotion I'm feeling!
I want a photograph of me holding her so tight
and have it last till its black and white
---------------------------------------------------
If I could have a choice tochoose
I wish life was like a rubix cube*
cause i would never loose
impossible to figure out
but all the same without a doubt
---------------------------------------------------

Thats the way I want it to be
locks on hearts with me holding the key
to open them all! How I have longed
to see your eyes, away from all that have wronged
me! It has been so long

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18 Apr 2007, 11:35 am

also i need a title and which one should be the chorus!

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18 Apr 2007, 11:42 am

I think the Rubik's Cube one should be the chorus. As for a title, how about...

The New Obsession?
The Right Wavelength?
A Friend at Last?

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And sadness turned to comfort
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18 Apr 2007, 11:44 am

how bout:
for titles:
-A New Obsession (Rubix Cube)
-Rubix Girl
-Rubix Cube Love

I dont really no
and the rubix is the chorus!

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18 Apr 2007, 11:47 am

Rubik's Eyes?

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But then I found
That I could speak to her,
In a way
And sadness turned to comfort
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18 Apr 2007, 12:04 pm

im going to let this thread run for 24 hours and then i will decide so keep those ideas coming in!

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19 Apr 2007, 11:07 am

the ideas time is closed! now if you have a really good idea, send me a message on this site. otherwise to vote click here

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