Draco's Quest (An original story of mine. )

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Draco's Quest part 1: The Two Common Dragons.

Centuries ago there was in an kingdom called Lutaria that was inhabited by two races, the Purebloods or humans and the feral bloods which where anthropomorphic beings. During the dark time known as the "Purification War" the pure bloods won control over the feral bloods and where able to dominate over them as the ruling race. Many feral bloods where killed or tortured while the more peaceful ones accepted this fate and became serfs under the pure blood rule. Soon however that was all to change.

There was in Lutaria two dragon feral blooded farmers that lived outside the kingdom. The eldest was known as Zab and he was the father of the second on Draco. Zab and Draco where peaceful dragons. They where experts in agriculture and trading, and would often sell their crops to the neighboring kingdom. Zab was a very kind and old dragon who also liked to make jokes about life and past experiences, his son however was very stern and serious. Draco took everything to heart and was notorious for misunderstanding his father's sayings. Zab would often ramble on about the days when the feral bloods where free and not under the oppressive pureblood government, and even though Draco pretended not to listen he was amazed by his father's story.

"You know son it was very different when I was your age, life was simpler." Zab would say. "Well the past is the past father" Draco would retort. In Draco's heart he yearned for change but was convinced that he was not destined for anything other than mere life as a farmer. He has heard the numerous rumors and stories of other dragons trying to fight the Pure bloods, how the magic of the purebloods would freeze the flesh of the dragons, how knights would stab the hearts of the dragons, how the pure bloods would even cook the flesh of the dead dragons and consume it, this gave him nightmares. Draco never realized his destiny would be upon him soon.

It was the usual day on the farm; they lived in the northern region where most dragons would have an aversion towards due to its cold and rainy climate. Draco was busy checking on the potato crops he worked to make plentiful. On that fateful day two pureblood soldiers where wandering in the farm looking for trouble. The soldiers where off of duty and bored. They stumbled upon Draco and Zab tending their plants.

"Oi! What have we here?" said one soldier.

"Looks like a couple of dragons with a green thumb." Responded the second soldier.

"Greetings gentlemen, welcome to our happy little farm." Said Zab in a welcoming manner. " I am Zab the dragon and this is my boy Draco" Zab said.

Zab motioned for Draco to say hello as Draco was shy around humans.

"Hello" Draco said. A soldier picked up a potato and was inspecting it, as he did this Draco was going to say something about this but he was cut off by his father who knew Draco would say something in anger.

"Please gentlemen have some of our crop, you must be tired from duty and it would not be right for us not to show hospitality to a bunch of men such as yourselves." Zab said in a cheerful manner.

"No thanks, these potato's look to stale" the soldier said in a mocking way as he threw it on the ground. The second soldier spit on Draco and this made him angry. Draco groaned but his father stayed calm.

The soldiers seeing they where not phasing the old man decided to mash up some potato's and head off to their unit.

"Father why did we let them do that to us?" said Draco in anger. "My son I would not be here today If I have let my anger loose on the Purebloods, yes there are many of them who are bad, but I found that they only act this way to compensate for their lack of understanding of us." Said Zab trying to explain.

"We should not have to let them push us around" Draco said. "Like I always said my boy, times have changed. The ones who strive for peace are the ones who live for a better tomorrow."

Draco’s Quest Part 2. “The tears of sorrow, the fires of revenge.”
Draco was once returning from his natural routine of fetching some chickens to be consumed by him and his father. It was a boring, yet tiring day as usual for the young dragon as he had worked hard all day tending the farms. While he was walking towards the farm he noticed some pureblood footprints on the path as he was walking.

“Purebloods are not normally known for traveling across this path in fear of bandits.” He said to himself as he pondered. Despite his curiosity he continued along the path back to his father’s farm. As he walked he became more and more nervous as he found the trail was leading down the same path as his farm. He soon was rushing to see if his father was ok.
As soon as Draco went to his farm he saw his father talking to what appear to be Pureblood soldiers and a mage constable.

“Father what is going on?” Asked Draco in a worried voice. Zab was about to reply, but the constable cut him off. “Dragon your father was caught flying from the marketplace to this very farm! A offense that is punishable by imprisonment!
I was only trying to carry our crops to the marketplace before midnight arrived.

“Surely that could explain my actions my good man.” Said Zab trying to be as cooperative to the constable and his entourage as possible.
“I am afraid not dragon. The law is the law, if we let one dragon use their wings we have to let other ones take flight, and that is a threat to our noble kingdom! Take him away! “


The guards started to take him to a place to be teleported by magic, but Draco tried to stop them, but alas the constable used a barrier spell and blocked Draco from coming to the aid of his father. “Father no!” Draco cried out as all the Purebloods and his father where magically warped to the kingdom.
Draco felt powerless. He tried to save his father, but he was to concerned with not trying to get captured himself. He started to weep for his father.

“Oh why father? Why you? You where one of the most peaceful and law abiding dragons in all of Lutaria! All you did is try to get your food to be sold faster…Why?!”

Draco wepped and wepped. His fiery tears would emit from his eyes. He felt so alone now, so alone and confused. He looked up as it started to rain on him. “Why mother? Why you then father? You both are innocents that were taken unfairly by this corrupt kingdom! You both where casualties of blind prejudice!”

Just then it started to lighting. Draco noticed something odd about the lighting. It was forming the sign of dragon, then a sword. Then he saw a odd picture of what looked like the form of a man with the sword through the heart of the figure.

“Yes I know we once where powerful fighters! Yet how can we stand up to the Purebloods?!?” Draco said in a moaning voice.
Then he saw something odd. It looked like around the dragon and the human the lighting strike a picture of different animals, some with swords, and some with bows. Then the thunder ceased.

Drago stopped his moaning and pondered for a moment. “Yes. I must right this vile wrong! I cannot give up on my father! He was right about being peaceful, but sometimes peace must be obtained through conflict! I swear this day I will get you back father! I swear that these Purebloods who wronged you will pay!” Draco said as he unleashed a blast of fire.

Well, that was interesting.

I think you need to go a little more in depth on the story, the characters, and the descriptions of the characters. I personally think you should expand on the whole "Purification War" and turn it into a little prologue/introduction thingy. And you haven't clearly explained what happened to Draco's mother. And are the dragons the only type of feral bloods? If so, you should just call the feral bloods "dragons", and not "feral bloods". But overall, it is a good story!

I suppose I should. I will have to think of how the war happened shouldn't I? She probably was killed by Purebloods during the war. Well actually they are not, in fact I was going to include a swift cat sidekick who is an archer, and a dog sidekick who was sort of a tactician. See the Purebloods conquered the other Feral blood species rather quickly. It was the dragons who put up most of the fight during the war. I have not have time to really ponder on it that much, as well as I often get writers block.

When I think of Draco this song comes into my head: https://www.google.com/url?sa=t&rct=j&q ... g5CY7TWyrQ

I guess the war didn't happen that long ago - you don't really specify when the war happened either. Or what sort of government Lutaria has. Or if Lutaria has any neighboring countries. Or the general shape/ecology of the landmass Lutaria is on. Or what sort of religion the people of Lutaria have.
I'm sorry - I'm getting nit-picky. You certainly don't have to go in detail on those things - it would just be a good idea. Readers like fantasy worlds with an in-depth history and such.
And, as a fellow writer, writer's block happens to everybody. The hardest part about writing is making yourself write. You've already managed to succeed where many others have failed by starting a story.

Well being in a fantasy setting I cannot make a standard clock, but it is sort of in Roman like times, well if you ever played the game Fire Emblem, it is sort of based off that type of fictional area in time. Well I was deciding to make other places, but the Planet is called Lutaria. It is very rural and European like in many ways.

I am all for writing it, but finishing is my biggest obstacle. I have one story where I only made the prologue and that is it.

I do have another story on here. It is a play, it is called: The Three Arrogant Pigs and the Kitsune. It is based off of the Three Little Pigs.

Although you do need to go in depth on some details, I actually like what you have so far.

I've never even heard of Fire Emblem.

And trust me, I've had the same problem with finishing stories. There are some stories in which I only wrote a couple pages before quitting and moving on to something else.

Thank you. =) I right plays as well, here is one I posted on here: https://www.google.com/url?q=http://www ... x1fyxM1DqA

Something like my story, only the animals are anthro, and not humans with animal features.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=pl ... Pc_G7KC-Ss